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VOTED NUMBER ONE SCRIPT ON FRANCIS FORD COPPOLA'S AMERICAN ZOETROPE FILM SCHOOL
Overall: 8.25
Character: 8.25
Plot: 8.25
Dialogue: 8.25
Originality: 8.25
Quality of Writing: 8.00
Cinematic Quality: 8.25

"Tales from the Twenty First Century- The Void" was a pleasure to read. Its characterisations were strong, and consistent through dialogue. Its visual elements were purposeful. The writing quality was of a high standard. (B.A.)

This has a good Twilight Zone feel. This is one of the most imaginative stories I've read here in the Film School… (M.J.P.)

I laughed out loud many times… Your "loser character" reminded me of Woody Allen and Rodney Dangerfield. The camera and its magic are a nice trick; and the "total void" in the basement is very good cinematically. The plot is good and solid. The dialog very good. Story was very funny… (T.C.)

'The Void' has a good main character, Conrad, the classic loser trying to get by. The idea of the 'magic device', this time an ancient camera that can take photos which leads to a alternate void, is a good one. (K.O.T.)

A really neat idea, unusual and exciting. It sets the film up well and transported me to a completely different place. I really liked the ending. Conrad is set up as a wholly believable character, and I felt so much sympathy for him. All in all a unique story with a very clever twist, and perhaps my favorite of all the tales. (A.L.G.)

You left me curious, which is very good! (J.M.A.)

Conrad in 'Void' has a great set-up into his life. I cared for this guy and wanted to see just what would happen. (K.O.T.)


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